The most notable global revision is the addition of two new paragraphs and the heavy restructure of my second paragraph. At the start of the semester, my revisions typically were only local often not thorough. I would have never moved where a paragraph was in an essay or added so much content during revision as I have in this process. My first draft also gives the credit of Sophie’s interview to Hope this is a significant error that I likely would not have caught without reading the essay over again, something that I did not often do thoroughly before this class. Another revision strategy I sometimes employed in this class that I never used before was reading my essay out loud to try to check for proper flow and errors. These strategies are still not employed perfectly in this or my more recent essay but I definitely have more respect for the recursive writing progress and many more tools in order to improve my writing in the future for this and any other classes. My peers commented on whether they felt my original topic sentences were strong or not and I was able to take that criticism and improve the quality of my paragraphs by expanding upon those topics and linking them to an improved thesis.
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