“life stories” by Julie Beck introduce the idea of everyone having a narrative that defines who they are and allows others to understand them. This sees real world application in the story told during Sophie’s interview with her boyfriend’s dad when he says ” Don’t judge anyone we are all the same.” In the story, he told he judges and mistreats a man he called at the time a “bum”. The man rented a storage space from his work. The man eventually couldn’t pay and had his belongings auctioned off but when the unit was inspected before it was sold off it was discovered that he was an accomplished lawyer whose life fell apart, upon discovering this the storyteller felt humbled. This applies the Beck’s concept to real life. When he knew the man as a bum he didn’t really know him he just knew what he thought of him at the time. Upon learning his life story he finally really knew who he was and learned a lesson that shaped him for the rest of his life.
\
This is a good start. Here are some suggestions to help you take this paragraph to the next level.
1) Try to articulate the paragraph’s main point using only one sentence. Now place this sentence at the top of the paragraph. This is your new and improved claim sentence, and it can act as an anchor for your “connecting analysis.”
2) Provide a quote as evidence from Beck.
3) Formally introduce Sophie’s podcast.
4) Consider providing your quote’s context BEFORE the quote.
5) Expand your connective analysis. After you articulate a clear claim and provide a quote from Beck, explain how the different parts works together to make your argument’s point.